The IELTS examination is held at the international level to check and judge the proficiency of students in the English language. It is conducted for four modules, that is, reading, listening, writing and speaking.
In this particular article, the example addition in IELTS writing task 2 will be discussed.
In IELTS essay writing, it is vital to extend and support your ideas in the body paragraphs. This can be done best by writing supporting points and examples specifically. However,
● The example given must be specific to the task's topic and your main idea should be clear and easy to follow, concise, and should look realistic.
● It should not be vague and confusing.
● Personal examples are ok but be careful that the essay doesn't look informal.
● In example, a business name, a university name, research, a newspaper name, or a place (country or city) can be used.
Addresses all parts of the task
Presents a clear position throughout the response
Presents, extends and supports main ideas, but there may be a tendency to over-generalise and/or supporting ideas may lack focus
Sufficiently addresses all parts of the task
Presents a well-developed response to the question with relevant, extended and supported ideas.
Fully addresses all parts of the task
Presents a fully developed position in answer to the question with relevant, fully extended and well supported ideas
It represents that the better you support your ideas or point with an example, the better the chances of getting a higher band score. Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’
Now the question arises, which is the best place to put an example and where to write an example in an essay. Example needs to be put after:-
● A main idea or topic sentence.
● Or Logically after a supporting idea.
● Or Near to the end of the main body paragraph.
Does every point need an example? The answer is no. As we know that the IELTS exam is a quality test and it does not require quantity. So in the writing test, you are not asked to write more and more points but you should logically explain one main idea in one paragraph with one supported example. Do not write a long list of point's only. You will get higher marks for developing your ideas with explanations and examples.
● Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.
● They are also easy to write because it is much simpler to use an example than to try and explain a complex issue.
The following can be used to give examples:
● For example,
● For instance,
● This is illustrated by….
● …such as….
● To illustrate….
● To cite an example,....
A proper structure of inserting an example has been developed after studying all the patterns and types of essays. It is
● A main idea related to topic (state the main idea)
● An Explanation to that idea (What does your main point mean? Why have you included it? How does it answer the question?)
● An Example related only (A specific example that illustrates your main point)
Remember that it is also not compulsory to include an example after each point. Even one example for the whole essay is enough if you have inserted it well after a main point.
So, now you know how to structure a paragraph and how to give an example in a paragraph, it is required that you avoid the mistake of being too informal. If you look at academic journals or books you will notice that the examples they give are as specific as possible. This gives your points more liberty and strengthens your opinion and argument in support.
You can make your example more specific by adding:
● place/business/university names
● names of people
Remember thay you don’t have to add all of these things, only one or two are required to make it more specific.
It will be better to include the examples related to your personal and real life experiences. For instance:-
Children often learn from their adults around them subconsciously. Discuss what they learn and what should be taught to them?
● To Illustrate, approximately 40% of teenagers inculcate the habit of having drugs and liquor by watching their parents.
To cite an example, a weekly Times Magazine states that around 60% of children behave aggressively when they watch their parents behaving so.
● Or (by writing of a place or a city)
For example, in India, a recent study showed that many old age homes have been established as children do not want to live with their parents as they have seen so with their grandparents.
For instance, the trend of new normal work from home has boosted up the usage of smart gadgets due to which children are having their screen timings increased.
As you can see, by thinking about your own life, you will be able to generate real ideas.
Today, the quality of life in large cities is decreasing. Discuss the causes and solutions.
Urbanisation and industrialisation to the present day has brought more opportunities in metropolitan cities but at a cost in the quality of life. With an increasing city's population, the challenges are also increasing for the globe as well as the local community. The causes and effects of these on the current generation, as well as possible solutions are discussed in further writing.
To begin with, the causes for a decrease in the quality of life are, paradoxically, the prosperity bestowed on such metropolitan centres. Their growth is largely due to the increase in opportunities which in turn increases their attractiveness. People are essentially trapped in a positive self-reinforcing cycle. While such developments have an immediate positive impact, it perpetuates a possible negative impact in the long term. A city can experience overcrowding, exorbitant property prices, and increased vulnerability to terrorist attacks. For example, the density of New York makes it a more efficient place to attack, when compared to a smaller city such as California. Therefore, urban citizens, especially the less well off, often experience a lower standard of living. Even greater than this, are the relevant examples of natural disasters such as recent fires in Australia, which brought about unprecedented weather patterns resulting in the destruction of wild and rare animals.
Considering the solutions, greater investment in public transport will ease traffic congestion, as would bike lanes. In theory, this would reduce air pollution, and possibly improve the well-being of the population if they did adopt a more active lifestyle and cycle to work. While these solutions are local, if adopted globally, would affect individuals and many countries alike. A collective effort is needed to use social networks and other media to highlight the negative effect of urbanization as well as the negative sides of the wider ramifications on the population.
To conclude, no doubt that urbanization's advantages outweigh the disadvantages, a wealthy city attracts a large population inflow, which in turn is responsible for the deteriorating lifestyles of people. However, Various solutions exist to mitigate such drawbacks and are being used to raise awareness of such negative impacts on many countries.
Look at a question asking why women should receive equal pay to men.
Main ideas- Suppose the main idea is that women achieve higher grades than men at university.
If the woman in the home is working alongside the man, the family can bring in more income and support their family more efficiently.
● With respect to a university- For example, at Oxford University in 2010, approximately 32% of female commerce graduates achieved First Class Honours, while only 5% of males achieved the same.
● To illustrate, studies show that women excel just as quickly if not faster than men do in their careers when given the opportunity.
● In respect to research- a recent study was conducted and scientists have proved that couples who are equal when it comes to gender are happier overall.
● In respect to a country- it is claimed that this trend is strongest in the UK and many campaigners stress the urgency to stop this situation.
I hope that idea of including an example in an essay is clear. Always remember that the IELTS exam is a high-profile test and be strictly formal in your language in the test. Do not get informal while writing the main ideas and explanations and examples too. Keep practicing for more writing.
Best of luck!